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I drew my sunglasses down and the scene changed - gray rubble amidst the green scrub and rocks.
"Do you want to go down to the cave, Ehva?"
Roark's hand, warm on my back, made me waver. I rubbed the cool weathered coin between my thumb and forefinger. I was in Ireland on March 17th on my seventeenth birthday. If the letters were true, today was it.
"Yeah, babe. Race you?"
Roark took racing seriously. It was hard to watch him running before me, laughing, his white smile and warm brown eyes twinkling at me. As if in competition, the coin in my hand winked even brighter, the gold forcing through the aged patina. I couldn't stay here. Could I?
The cave, damp and smelling of fishy seaweed, made this place in my life easy to say goodbye to. Roark cooing and taunting me in the dark made it harder. I had two choices here - a kiss with the human I loved, hoping his embrace would hold me here forever. Or I could toss this coin into the sea and buy my way back to the past, to the realm of Fae. I turned my cheek to Roark's kiss and flipped the coin into the dark water.
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20 comments:
Happy you cheated. I enjoyed reading this! :)
A nice idea, and an interesting use of a real place to anchor it.
Really good piece- left me wanting to know what happens and I like the hints of magic
Sounds like such a magical place! I loved the imagery at the start, though I'm a bit of a pleb when it comes to botany--no idea what any of those flowers would look like! Really curious as to how the story will pan out...
Loved this~ I felt right there with them! Great scene :)
Great scene! Now I want to know more about this story--what happens now that she's thrown the coin into the sea? :)
Great image painting!
Great job!! Loved your imagery! You asked for suggestions as to where to go with this...have you read The Little Book? (forget the author, sorry!) My suggestion would be to return to the past and link up with the present MC's ancestors.
Oh, I love how that ended, with that little coin toss.
Loved that she tossed the coin and the imagery was lovely!
Thank you for entering! I'll announce the finalists on Monday on my blog, and I'll drop back by here and give you a comment on your entry then as well. (And I have no problems with you reusing a story again. It's not cheating to me. :) )
I was worried you were going to leave us hanging, not knowing what she decided to do. :) Nice imagery and I would love to know more.
Very nice. I found you from the flash fiction blogfest. Amazing!
Wow, you hooked me with that last paragraph. Now I want to know which choice she picked. :D
Love it! I would have him turn her back to him and he deeply kisses her. His jerking her back toward him causing the coin to fall short of the water.
I gotta know what happens! Great job hooking this reader.
Donea, this piece is wonderful. I felt there was a great mystery surrounding the characters. The ending was fantastic. I loved the mixture of two worlds bridged together. Very well done.
Nicely done! :)
I am a sucker for romance. I guess I would have the lovers stay together somehow. Good entry! And I've not read it before, so it's not cheating to me.
Great romance. I'm a push over for Happy-ever-after. Keep them together, please. :)
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